Sabtu, 23 Mei 2009

WRITING PRODUCT III

My Unforgettable moment

When I was 9th junior high school, my friends and I had a plan to go to one of my friend’s villa in terawas after we faced national exam. And the plan became true, about 2 weeks after we faced national exam we prepared to our trip. I still remembered that day, on Thursday we agreed to come together in one of my friend’s house and start our trip from there. We trough our trip about half an hour because not very crowded. After we arrived there, the first thing we did is devided bedroom. After that, we take a rest for a while, and then we come together in the backyard and enjoy the nature. In the night, after we had dinner we come together on the second floor and playing card until midnight come. Next we go to own bedroom and sleep. But about an hour after we take a rest, we heard some of my friends scream and run out for theirs room. So all of us run out too from our room and asked what happened. They said that they heard a woman cried beside their room. We so afraid heard that but we should take a rest that night because we so tired. So we tried to forgetted the first night there.

But in the second day, we faced the curious thing. When we come together on the swimming poll which placed in the back of villa, one of my friend who was swim scream and she said that there is a scorpion in the swimming pool. We incredibly surprised because we were there about two hours but nothing in the swimming pool until one of my friend scream. Other than after we want came back to villa we look some of scorpion in the backyard near swimming pool. I think this is so strange because I remembered in the first day we come together there, but nothing.

In the evening, we come together in the second floor and playing card again. Suddenly we heard chair in the gazebo take out a sound but no one there. In the beginning, we suspicion one of my friends tried to frighten us, but we wrong. So that night we not sleep well. And the third day we come back to Surabaya. That is my unforgettable moment until now.


13 komentar:

  1. nadhira ..

    your paragraph is good enough ..

    but in some of sentence there are mistake ..
    you should use simple past ..
    because your story happened in the past .
    that's all .
    give me comment too ..

    BalasHapus
  2. Hi nadhira..
    Thanks for comment my blog..
    hmm.. your paragraph is interesting and good.
    But, there are mistakes in your grammar, please check your paragraph.

    Pratiwi Ramandita 120810487G

    BalasHapus
  3. Hello Thanks YOur Comment In my Blog
    Im Sory me scarer coment in your BLog
    because i am opportunity Confused make coment in blog.heheheheheheh

    i think Your Writing is very draw,,,,,, and tighten
    ...and please check your gramer...ukai,,,,,,,
    Thanks...RUDINAL 120810491G

    BalasHapus
  4. your writing is good enough,..

    and you make your paragraph is order,.

    elok 120810486G

    BalasHapus
  5. I think your paragraph is good...

    but there are mistakes in your paragraph.

    And you can check your grammar...

    BalasHapus
  6. thx for your comment dir. .
    i think your paragraph is good enough. .
    and the last please check your grammar okey. .
    see you. .
    . . . . .Rico. . .

    BalasHapus
  7. Hi..dhira,,,,

    i think your paragraph is quite focus on your unforgettable moment....

    and your writing is good enough,,,,:D

    i'lll wait your comment in my blog


    thanks,,,:)

    BalasHapus
  8. Wildania(120810477G)


    your paragraph have little mistakes in some sentences.
    your grammar is enough!

    BalasHapus
  9. your paragraph is great Dira..
    it was an unforgettable moment, yeah!

    when I read it, i found you always use the word 'come'. it supposed to be in V2, 'came'.

    so far, all are great.

    by 120810185G

    BalasHapus
  10. Ok My friend..............

    After I read your Unforgettable allow me give comments.

    Yeah...! I Think your paragraph is very well but a few mistakes. And I hope you also correct my task.

    I think that all my comments. see U again. Bye....

    BalasHapus
  11. By : Yulia Primita sari (120810494G)

    Thank you for your comment in my blog before.

    - I think your paragraph is good enough, but I find little mistake in your grammar.

    BalasHapus
  12. Hy dira...
    I think your paragraph is good enough...

    But I still look few mistakes...
    About your grammar...
    So,you must be carefull again...

    That's all!!!
    By:Ria Anggraini.S
    120810492G

    BalasHapus
  13. hi i am RUdy...120810491G

    i think your paragraph is good enough even you made some mistake on your writing....
    be careful on write a vocabulary,,,because it will be misunderstanding if you write on wrong vocab.....

    that's all my comment

    BalasHapus