MY HOT CITY
I was born on 4th December 1990 in Jakarta city. It’s the capital and the largest city of Indonesia, its located on the north west coast of Java island, At the Mouth of the Ciliwung river. Jakarta is the biggest population in indonesia, it’s about more than 23 million people live in this Metropolitan area, because Jakarta suffer from major urbanization problems. Jakarta isn’t crowded about the people, but also about the transportations. It causes Jakarta be the dirt most poluted city in the world after Mexico city and Bangkok. As the nations lagerst city and capital, jakarta has lured much national and regional talent who hope to find a greater audience and more opportunities for succes but Jakarta also the home of many universities.
Jakarta has many interesting place, like shopping centre and park such as TMII, Monas, DUFAN, Plaza seenayan and many more. Dufan is the most favourite and famous place to visit in weekend or holiday. Because there play and relax your mind from your daily activities.
Commented by: Rulyana O.S (120810493 G)
BalasHapusWell,,
I think your assignment is good enough.
And your language is easy to understand.
But, there are still some mistakes you type.
Ex:
-succes ( you should type "success")
-many interesting place (you should type "interesting places", because it's plural)
-poluted ( you should type "polluted")
And I agree when you said that Jakarta is the dirt most polluted.
That's all from my comment..
i like your story and you have promotion Jakarta but maybe some people thinking that live in jakarta its so hard because jakarta is small town with thousands of society.
BalasHapusyour job well, but this job will better if you not about yourself.
BalasHapusex: you was born,etc.
nadz-hometown.blogspot.com
I like your writing...
BalasHapusit's good...
but, you should can describe more specific again about your hometown,..
commented by : elok